Oh the fun!
These paths were destined to cross
A choice made
No time delayed
Then a move
A smile from a stranger
A brief passing on the street
Soon closer in view
Passed too quickly, yet soon to be reviewed
To become more familiar
A wrong turn perceived
A warning given
From a stranger in the hall
Familiarity triggered
The street recalled
The smile remembered like the brilliant flash from a camera.
Edit
These rivers were destined to cross
A choice made
No time delayed
Then a move as a wave trying to break from the sea
A smile from a stranger
A brief passing on the street
Soon closer in view
Risen, passed, and settled too quickly, yet soon to be reviewed
To become more familiar
A wrong turn perceived
A warning given
From a stranger in the hall
Familiarity triggered
The street recalled, rushing
The smile remembered like the brilliant flash from a camera
Capturing the magnificent spray on the rocks before
The Ocean recedes.
1 comment:
I think I like the first version of the two better. The first has a continuous context of foot traffic, while the second uses two sets of symbols, and therefore feels more discontinuous to me.
I like your sense of free verse too.
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